D.C. Story, Revised
On a calm morning in April, a charter bus carrying some students from two
The chaperones were the last to get off the bus and quickly counted their students. Seeing that everyone was accounted for, the tallest of the chaperones, Mr. Tremmon, who was also a teacher to most of them, strode to the front of the group.
“This is the Air and
Most of the students’ heads were twisted around to make a mental note of where he was pointing when the chaperone continued, “We will be having lunch now in the cafeteria of the Air and
“Yeah, can we eat yet?” a stocky student muttered under his breath, eliciting half-hearted chuckles from some of his students standing near him.
“Any important questions?” the teacher asked, ignoring the impatience of the boy. “All right. Please follow Ms. Bertram and her pink umbrella to the cafeteria.”
The tour guide marched off towards the entrance of the museum as the students, in small pairs and trios, straggled after her.
On the coast of
“This is Arthur’s castle, Tintagel, and is reputed to have been impregnable when the walls were still standing. Heather, it’s a shame that all that’s left is this group of ruins now,” the girl’s companion said. He was a tall lad with brown hair and emerald green eyes. Slung on his back was a hiker’s pack identical to hers. His enthusiasm for Arthurian legends was visible on his face, as it radiated enthusiasm.
“Isn’t this where Arthur’s father tricked his mother into sleeping with him while he had her husband murdered?” she asked, as she fought to keep her eyes from rolling.
“Depends on which version of the legends you read,” he replied as they picked their way, step by step, down the path heading towards the ruins.
In the heart of
He turned the key in the ignition and the engine roared to life, announcing to the whole street that he was leaving. He glanced over his shoulder to check for oncoming traffic and seeing none, sped away from the center of
The tall chaperone stood out from the crowd of students in the Museum cafeteria in two distinct ways. The first was his height. At over six feet tall, he had at least a foot of height on the average student. The second thing was his pale skin and fiery red hair. Amid all of the dark clothing and features he was never inconspicuous.
“All right students. When I am done talking you will line up for your meal voucher and we will get lunch. When you are done eating, you are then free to explore the Museums. Any questions?” He paused, waiting for answers. “No? Then line up.”
The hungry students milled and squeezed themselves into a single file line and lunch began.
In the far north of
Every few yards she would shift the straps of her pack into a more comfortable position as she stopped to admire the remaining sections of wall where it stood amid the rolling green, rocky hills.
“What magnificent and timeless architecture,” she thought to herself, “It has lasted for
centuries and yet here I am, who may not even last for one.”
She shook her head in an effort to focus on why she was here. She kept moving down the stretch of wall, pausing every so often to admire the most beautiful and rugged landscape she had ever seen.
Far to the south, a young man, Daniel, wandered through the ruins of Glastonbury Abbey, reputedly the burial site of King Arthur. The abbey buildings were in ruins, and the monks had long since left. It was now a site of great historical value and was treasured for its connections to
As his pale blue eyes fell on a wooden sign on the south side of Lady Chapel, he stopped dead in his tracks. His breath caught in his throat as he read the sign, which marked the last resting place of King Arthur and his queen, Guinevere.
He bowed his head in solemn respect for the loss of a man he had never known in life, but had come to know so well through myth and legend. The boy’s long brown hair fell, obscuring the tears that dripped down his face without a sound.
After many mournful minutes, the young man palmed his eyes drying the tears and erasing any trace of them from his face. Looking up, he realized that he had missed exploring the rest of his ruins in his desire to find the Pendragon’s alleged grave.
He began to wander off, his thoughts still behind him, pondering the monument that he had found. He was so engrossed in thought that his mind didn’t even register that, in his peripheral vision, he saw a knight clad in pitch black armor with blazing red eyes watching him.
“Heather, why don’t we go down to
“I don’t want to take you away from enjoying
“Honey, this vacation isn’t just about what I want, you know. Besides,” he added with a wink, “while we’re down there we can explore Merlin’s Cave.”
“All right,” she decided after a few moments, “This heat was starting to get to me anyways. That water does look very refreshing.”
They strode towards the stairs at the edge of the ruins, and began to descend to the beach.
At
Two of the researchers in the excavation grid stood and stretched their stiff backs.
“Time’s up on our shift, Kelli. Want to go get something to eat?” the man asked the woman standing next to him.
Her short black hair shook as she turned to look at him before replying, “I’m famished. Food sounds wonderful. Any ideas?”
The man smiled wide, hazel eyes twinkling, as he said, “I think I have just the thing we need. Shall we?”
“Lead the way.”
They climbed out of the pit and headed towards the command tent to clock out.
Alan and Andrew left the cafeteria in
As soon as they were out the door, they headed across the Mall towards the
Back in the north of
Elisa let her mind wander as she gazed at the rugged, green hills of the
“I have to focus on why I’m here,” she thought as she opened her sketchbook, “Unfinished art is worthless.” She pulled a pencil out of a case in her backpack and tried to capture the essence of her surroundings on paper.
The two archaeologists were now hiking across the Salisbury Plain, headed away from
“Just a little farther, Kelli, and then we’ll eat lunch,” John said as he scanned the area for a suitable rest stop. “Ah, over there in the shade of that oak should be perfect.”
He led the way over to the ancient oak tree. He handed the picnic basket to his lady companion and began to spread the blanket on the ground in the shade of the oak.
“Kelli, here we are. Are you hungry?”
“Very much so. Whatever is in that basket, the smell has been arousing my appetite for meter,” she replied as he helped her get comfortably seated.
“Good. I hope you enjoy what I brought for lunch,” he said while he began to unpack the basket.
Kelli’s eyes widened as she saw the amount of food that had been brought for lunch.
“John, how long were you planning this picnic?” she asked.
“For close to a month, honestly. I wanted to show you how much I value your friendship,” he explained as he looked inside the basket, checking to make sure he hadn’t forgotten anything.
“Now, for lunch, we have prosciutto, smoked salmon, rosemary crostini, brie, and a bottle of Riesling…” He listed everything and pointed to it, and soon they were heartily enjoying their lunch.
The boys moved through the
“Alan, is that you?” she asked.
One of the boys turned towards her with a puzzled look on his face, as if he was trying to remember something he had forgotten. His brow furrowed in confusion.
“Do I…know you…wait! Is that you Lauren?” he asked, almost shouting in the quiet museum.
“Alan, it is you!” she cried. “I haven’t seen you since I moved out. What are you doing on the East Coast?” she said, her eyes gleaming with pleasure at seeing her lost friend.
“I can’t believe it, Lauren. I’m here on a school trip during Spring Break. Today, we get to explore the Smithsonian Museums that surround the mall before we have to meet again for dinner. What are you doing here?” he said smiling at her.
Seeing him smile at her caused her to shift from one foot to the other as she hooked her hair behind her almost imperceptibly pointed ears. Alan was the only person who had ever noticed, and he had said that it reminded him of the ancient and wondrous beauty of Tolkien’s elves. She blushed a little in remembrance of that compliment.
“I came to enjoy the Museums,” she said, finding her voice, “I have a day off from school today and our home isn’t too far from here.”
“How about you and I spend the rest of my time here exploring the museums together?” Alan asked. “I would love to hear what you have been up to since you moved.”
Alan turned to Andrew, who looked like the uncomfortable third wheel he had just become.
“Do you mind if I go with Lauren until we have to meet up later? I’ve known her since before I was walking, and since she moved I haven’t seen her in years. You’re welcome to come with us too.” Alan looked uncomfortable, stuck between his two friends.
Thankfully, Andrew removed then tension himself.
“Sure, I understand. If a cute girl came up to me in a museum, looking to spend time with me, I’d ditch you too.” He smiled at his good-natured teasing, and then waved good-bye to wander through the museum alone.
Her smile widened as the two of them talked quietly about old times and new, as they began to stroll through the museum’s halls.
Elisa looked up from her sketch and compared it to the landscape she was drawing.
“It seems like something is missing,” she thought, “Like the land is hiding something from me.”
She had the tall trees in the right places; she had captured the ruins of
Alan and Lauren continued to chat with each other as they meandered through the Natural History Museum.
“What time is it, Lauren?” Alan asked, too lazy to fish in his backpack for his watch.
“12:40 P.M. Why?” she replied.
“Damn it! I have to meet the rest of the group at 4:30, which doesn’t leave us much time together. Plus, I haven’t seen any of the Air and
“You haven’t?” she cried. “Then we have to go there. They have this piece of rock on display and they don’t know what it’s made of or where it came from. They found it buried ion
“Plus,” she added, “It has always reminds me of you for some reason.”
She excitedly led him towards the exit of the museum by the arm. He had missed Lauren a lot and found her excitement infectious, in no small part due to the soft touch of her fingers bidding him to follow her.
“That lunch was amazing,” Kelli stated as she leaned back to rest on her elbows. “Thank you John.”
“You’re most welcome. It was my pleasure.”
He leaned back beside her and admired the countryside they were in, lush, rolling, green hills and trees, scattered about with hedges and rocks.
“This land is so…timeless,” he said as he struggled to capture his feeling in words. “I look around and I don’t see any remainder of modern civilization anywhere. More than that, I don’t sense it looming beyond the horizon. It’s, I don’t know, so serene here we could be in a different century.”
She looked at him while he was talking.
“You’ve been working too hard,” she joked. “Maybe you should apply for a vacation so you can relax more. I think you may be sick.”
“What, and not see your pretty smile every day at work and miss your joyous company?” he retorted.
Her eyes widened in surprise as what he said sank in.
“What did you call me?” she asked after a few moments of silence.
“Pretty. That and a joy to be around. Why?”
“No reason. That’s just the kindest thing a man has ever said to me,” she replied.
“If that is the nicest thing a man has ever said to you, then you need to meet better men,” he said, only half-joking.
She smiled contentedly and turned her eyes again to the landscape surrounding them. John sat up and gazed at her for a few moments, as if searching for the words he needed to articulate what he was thinking.
“Kelli?” he said after a moments.
“Yes, John?”
He reached over and cupped her hand in his. He leaned over it and brushed the top of her hand with a soft, almost imperceptible, kiss. Looking into her eyes he said, “Kelli, I meant every word.”
She smiled from ear-to-ear. She had been waiting for him to make the first move, and now he had.
Heather and her boyfriend, Dave, continued to enjoy the beach beneath Tintagel castle. They had walked along the beach sand and had admired the ruins from below as Dave told her more about the legends surrounding the site, which she only listened to with half an ear.
Now they both floated on their backs in the cool, clear blue water.
“This is so refreshing and peaceful,” Heather sighed in contentment.
“Maybe Merlin blessed it so that it remains pure and invigorating,” Dave quipped.
She rolled her eyes at him and continued to enjoy the water. Periodically, she glanced towards where their belongings sat on the shore, checking to make sure that it was still there.
Alan and Lauren wandered through the halls of the Air and
“The meteorite rock is over in this wing of the Museum,” Lauren directed, after viewing the other areas of the museum. “Ready to go see it?”
“Sure thing,” Alan replied. “I want to see this rock that has you so excited.”
The two of them, led by Lauren, drew steadily closer to the rock.
“It’s getting rather cloudy, John. Should we pack up and go?” Kelli asked, looking up at the darkening sky.
“Not yet. We aren’t due back at the site for a while. Plus, those clouds aren’t rain clouds. It’s just getting overcast,” he reasoned.
“All right. If you say so…,” she teased.
They continued to talk as they admired the flowing, lush landscape discussing how they had each become so entranced with archaeology and history. They talked about where they grew up, what college they went to, and anything else that came to mind.
“Did you see that?” Heather asked nervously.
“See what?” Dave replied, oblivious to the change in her mood.
“I though I saw a man watching us from the mouth of that cave over there,” she pointed to where she had seen the stranger, farther up the beach.
“From Merlin’s Cave?” he asked. “It’s probably some nerd’s idea of a practical joke. Don’t worry about it,” he said as he stretched out on the water and continued floating.
“It sounds like your idea of a practical joke,” she muttered under her breath.
“It’s in the next room after this one, Alan,” Lauren said, “We’re almost there.” Her excitement was visible as she kept glancing between where Alan stood in front of an exhibit and the doorway that led into the next room.
“It’s just a rock,” Alan teased.
“I know,” Lauren said in a more solemn tone, “For some reason, though, which I can’t explain, this rock always reminds me of you when I see it.”
Alan gazed at his friend beside him for a few seconds to see if she was serious. He decided that perhaps it would be best if he believed her right now.
“All right, let’s go see this rock,” he said.
Chug! Clunk! Sputter!
He pulled his motorcycle onto the side of the road as the engine stalled. He rolled to a stop and dismounted.
Mike knelt down next to his bike and surveyed the damage. It was repairable, he decided after several minutes, but not with anything he had with him.
“It’s getting rather cloudy,” he thought. “I hope I don’t get stuck out in the rain.”
The road was empty of travelers in either direction and he was alone out on the plains of
“I’m not too far from
He began to stride down the road, a little more hopeful at the prospects of finding help now.
Elisa’s attention was interrupted long before she realized by what. She was still staring at her sketch of the surrounding countryside attempting to figure out what it was missing. Slowly she realized what was invading her thoughts; the sound of drums.
“Drums?” she wondered, “What are drums doing out here?”
Her ears perked up as she tried to pinpoint which direction the sound was coming from. After what seemed like eternity, she decided the sound was coming from the North, from the Scottish side of
“There it is,” Lauren whispered, “on the far side of the room.” The awe she held for this mysterious object was evident. The size of the rock was apparent, even across a room that was filled with other magnificent exhibits.
Alan felt his steps being pulled towards the rock now by an invisible force that was impossible to resist.
“Was it just plain curiosity?” he thought. “A desire to find out why this rock reminded Lauren of him? I don’t know.”
“I thought you said that civilization wouldn’t intrude here,” Kelli stated.
“I did. Why?” John said, one eyebrow raised in question.
“Don’t you hear that?” she queried, “Listen. Very faintly I can hear what sounds like metal scraping and clanging together.”
They both strained their ears towards the distance, suddenly aware that something strange was happening.
“Dave,” Heather called to her friend, anxiety apparent in her voice. The near panic pitch of her calling got his attention.
“What’s wrong, Heather?” he asked, as he waded over to where she stood.
“
He was worried that she would ask such a silly question, when the answer was so obvious. What worried him even more was that she sounded very serious.
“Yes it’s just ruins, why?” he asked, as he gazed at her and up at the ruins in an attempt to figure out what was bothering her.
“All I can see is the castle. Not ruins, a full castle like it would have been before it was ruined.”
“That must just be your imagination, honey,” he said, trying to sooth her.
“No,” she demanded, “you aren’t listening. I see the walls, and there are men in chain mail on them keeping watch. The towers and gates are whole. It won’t disappear.”
“There’s nothing there, Heather. I don’t see any of that,” he said, even more worried now.
“Then why won’t it go away?” she stammered, suddenly worried about her own sanity.
Dave stared at her, not knowing what to say. He glanced at the ruins and then at her again, still unable to comfort her.
Daniel watched the dark clouds overhead and wondered if it was going to rain today. His attention drifted down to the immense walls of the Abbey, and again he admired the strength and endurance of the structures.
“Whoever built this,” he thought, “built it to last. Not like buildings these days.”
As he finally brought his gaze down to the ground floor, he began to wander through the grounds. Without realizing it, his feet began taking him back towards Arthur’s grave marker near Lady Chapel. Only this time, as he rounded the corner of the chapel, he saw a man in pitch black armor gazing down at the grave sign. The boy assumed the man was just an elaborate piece of the re-enactment until the man turned around and gazed at the boy with eyes of fire.
The lad backed away as if he had disturbed a bear, and began walking away as fast as he could once he was out of sight.
“Only half a kilometer left,” he thought. “As soon as I get over this last hill, I should be at
Mike continued trudging down the road, hoping he could find shelter before the storm came.
Alan and Lauren were now only a dozen steps from the rock. They both felt the mystical allure it held for them. Without realizing it, they had joined hands as they walked, journeying together towards the unknown. A small part of each of their brains felt the comfort that each other’s hand gave.
The drumming got louder, Elisa thought. She gathered all of her belongings into her pack. She stood up from where she was sitting in the shadow of the southern side
Before her, thousands of naked men and women painted in woad and armed with axes, swords, and torches charged the wall amidst the clamoring of drums. Even after rubbing her eyes with the palm of her hands, they did not disappear.
As Elisa turned to run, she saw a second image that shattered any grip she had on reality. To the south of
“Look at that!” John shouted as he pointed to the landscape in front of them.
Kelli looked and saw something she would never be able to explain. Before their very eyes, two armies rose out of the ground of Salisbury Plain, the violent battle already joined. The metal clanging was louder now and it was obvious what had been causing it now.
“You see this too, right Kelli? I’m not going crazy, am I?” John asked as he turned towards the woman next to him.
“Not unless we both are,” she muttered.
Alan and Lauren now stood before the rock on its stand. They stared at the mysterious object, entranced.
“This is…indescribable, Lauren. I feel pulled to this rock,” he whispered.
“So do I,” she said. “So do I.”
The lad, Dan, wasn’t paying attention to where he was going. He was weaving through the ruins of Glastonbury Abbey, hoping that the strange thing he saw wasn’t following him.
Eventually, the realization that his surroundings were brighter than before wormed its way into his consciousness. He stopped, stunned into silence. He stood in the Abbey and gazed around him.
“There’s a roof! And torches!” he wondered. His eyes swept over the pews, stained glass windows, and all the tools and articles of the monastery’s faith.
Then, he saw something that brought tears to his eyes. Before him, two rows of monks clad in white robes fit for angels lined either side of the central aisle leading up to the altar. They chanted in a forgotten language, but the intention was clear; they were singing a requiem mass. A black ornately carved sarcophagus waited before the altar to hold the remains of the mass’s recipient.
Dan was speechless. Beyond that, he was incapable in that moment of understanding anything he saw. His thoughts were scattered and all he could do was stare in wonder. Before he could find an answer, one was given to him. The heavy oaken doors at the rear of the church groaned open. Dan turned to see six monks, clad in robes of the blackest night, carrying a dead King on a pallet into the abbey. His royal lineage was obvious, from the exquisite craftwork of the armor and clothes he wore to the ornate crown resting above his head. A large sword was lying on his chest, the dead man’s hands folded on the hilt, while the point of the blade was pointing towards his toes.
Two women were following the processions, one whose bent face was wet from tears that flowed freely from here eyes and dripped from her cheeks, the other whose face was upturned in solemn respect and mourning.
The woman whose face was full of quiet respect chanted in a hushed tone that nevertheless carried throughout the chapel.
“Here lies a Son of Thor,
Whose thunderous anger and lightning quick judgement
Sent his enemies to their destruction.”
The second woman now spoke:
“Here lies a Son of Eros,
Whose passionate embrace and gentle touch
I, his wife, was blessed to know.”
The first woman again:
“Here lies a brother of Baldur,
Whose compassion for the blind, the lame,
The poor and the needy gave them help and rest.”
The second:
“Here lies a brother of Apollo,
Whose wisdom was tempered by his love,
For music and for life.”
The first:
“Here lies the Father of Avalon,
Whose belief in the sanctity of all life helped the Aos Si
Find save havens among the abodes of men.”
The second:
“Here lies the Father of Camelot,
Who filled its pale stone walls with Peace,
Justice, Strength, and Beauty.”
Alternating:
“Here lies the High King of the Isles.”
“Here lies the High King who united the tribes.”
“Here lies the High King who melded old ways with new, preserving both to the glory of
all.”
“Here lies the High King, who protected us from evil and corruption, at home and
abroad.”
Together:
“Here lies the High King of England, whose death has saved us all.”
The second woman:
“Here lies a son of God,
Who defended the defenseless,
“And aided all in need with faith, hope, and love.”
The second woman cried uncontrollably as her barely contained grief rose to the surface once again. The other looked Daniel in the eyes, holding his gaze, and whispered:
“Here lies the High King who shall return to us when we are in need.”
She paused, as if saying one last mental goodbye to the dead man, and then she laid a hand on the sword and both she and the sword vanished from sight, leaving Daniel with a grieving widow, chanting monks, and a dead king.
Daniel wept.
Together, Alan and Lauren reached for the rock and touched it at the same time. A flood images poured through their brains, too fast to hold onto, to recognize, or to remember.
As Mike crested the hill before
When he awoke an indeterminate time later, a dense fog was pouring onto the plains, and before him, where
Unseen animals howled somewhere behind him and Mike began walking towards the castle, hoping safety and security from whatever was happening could be found there. The fog closing in behind him preventing him from going anywhere besides the castle.
As he came to a stop before the castle walls, he noticed that the fog was only held back by a pair of torches, one on each side of the closed doors.
Soon others joined him before the gates: a young woman who appeared as if she had come from the beach, a young lad with a tear stained face and bloodshot eyes, who stood open-mouthed as he stared at the castle walls, a woman wearing a hiker’s pack, and a young man and woman who appeared hand-in-hand.
“Where are we?” the man asked.
“On Salisbury Plain,” Mike responded.
“Impossible,” his female companion stated, “There are no castles like this on Salisbury Plain. The only thing we should be able to see is
“We’re roughly standing where
Everyone looked at each other, more unnerved than they were before.
Some indefinable time later, the strangers heard more howling in the fog and darkness. Out of the mist stumbled a young man, carrying an unconscious girl in his arms followed by a wolf hound who seemed to be protecting and guiding the two. As he entered the ring of torchlight, the gates cracked open, pulled by some unseen power. Everyone looked at each other for what seemed like hours, and then, without speaking a word, they all walked through the gates and into the courtyard of this mysterious castle.

2 Comments:
I don't know about this. The structure of the story seems kind of nebulous. Obviously there's a lot of mythology embedded into the storyline, but it seems to overpower the narrative and, rather than lead it, seems to bog it down. There isn't much here that I'm really into. Maybe less of a focus on the canon and more on the characters involved? That's all I can think of.
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Seriously, thanks for the critique. I have been wondering what people have though. I would have to agree with what you said about needing more character development/involvement. I had pictured this as a prologue to a story, which then begins with the characters being reborn in a more mythological/fantasy setting where they remembered nothing of this when. But, seeing as this would be the beginning of the story, you are absolutely correct. I need to make it more...interesting...for lack of a better word, and rely less on the suspense/mythology.
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